Today is sundy . My father and mother would like to take him to the park . I like it very much ,and my two sisters want to go there,too. So they are wearing their new clothes. My father and I take some bread , eggs , fruit , and something to drink .We are playing and singing in the park. My father and l are sitting in the boat . lt is about five o'clock afternoon.we are go home. l an very happy today.♦
评语:本文描述今天到公园去的活动,应用过去时较为合适,句中第一句和最后一句为客观情况,时态不变,文中其余句子的时态要用过去时。句中几处大写“I”有误,应为作者输入时打错键。文中对公园中活动描述过于简单,体现不出题意,以后的写作中要注意审题。文中拼写错误不多,但时态运用有误,作者在练习时应多加留意。