This is a English boy.His name is Jim Green.He is 12.His school is No.4 Middle school.He is in Class 2,Grade 1.He is number 5.He is in Row 3,Team 6.Miss Gao is his English teacher.She is a woman.Li Yan is not here.She is at home. Li Yan is Jim’s friend.
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This is a English boy 此处a的应该改为an.
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