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Our Out-of-class Activities
作者:STEVEN520    时间:2008-08-16    状态:已批改   点击数:333    [收藏该文章]
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         I’d like to tell you something about the out-of-class activities in our school. We usually have activities from 4:50 p.m. to 5:50 p.m. every day. We often have some sports on the playground. Some students like basketball and football. Other students like other games. We also have interest groups like drawing, singing and dancing. Now most of us like playing computer games. We go to the English corner on Wednesday afternoon. I think it is very interesting to talk in English there. I hope we will have more time to play and less homework to do. &



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1.    第三句话中的“have”用“do”或“play”更恰当。
2.    第六句话中,应在“like”前加逗号。
评语:本文描述了作者学校丰富多彩的课外活动,语言流畅,结构合理。文中无拼写错误和语法错误,作者的英语运用能力较以前有了极大提高。
                    
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[glass] it is not bad aritcle!

[STEVEN520] 谢谢!(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……

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