Hello,welcome to Beijing .As a chinese ,I am gald to tell you something about Beijing. Now, please quite and listen me Do you know Beijing Roast Duck .It is so delicious that people all over the world like eating it . There are also mang places of interest in Beijing.souch asThe Great Wall ,Tian men square and The yi he yuan. Du hear "a man never go to The Great Wall is not a bawcock" IFYou go to there you can take photos and see beautiful scenery. I think you will have a good time
1 please quite and listen me.改为 please be quiet and listen to me quite 是“非常”而 quiet 是“安静的”两个单词很容易混淆，此处应用形容词quiet ，形容词不能独立做谓语，所以前面加系动词" be".
2 listen 是不及物动词，接宾语时要带"to"
3 souch as..应为such as ...单词拼写错误
4 Du hear "a man never ......"改为 Do you hear "He who has never been to the Great Wall is not a true man. “不到长城非好汉”
本篇可以说写得相当不错，看来小作者的英语底子不错。只是写作文时，再细心点就好了。注意标点符号，不要忘了。
