Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Li Hua.I would like to work as a volunteer for the Winter Asian Games.I am a 18-year-old alive and wise boy who is a graduate now.I am good at talking with someone by English,what is more,I like to listen and sing English songs which not only improve my English skills,but also know culture or history about other countries better than before.I like sports,especially playing basketball,I feel comfortable after I play basketball.Making friends is my speciality,I believe three men walk with me,there must have a teaher.I also am delighted to help anyone at anytime.You know,I surely know my live place’s things clearly,besides those famous sights,buildings and so on.At last,if I can be a volunteer luckily,I will try my best to help anyone.
批改：
1. I am a 18-year-old alive and wise boy 本句话表达得不够理想。可以这样说，I am a lovely and wise boy of 18 years old.
2. I am good at talking with someone by English 介词用法错误，应该是in.
3. , but also know culture or history about other countries better than before. 本句话是并列上边的定语从句的，即先行词还是I like to listen and sing English songs这两件事情，同样在定语从句中做主语，因此这样表达就错了，可以变成but also make me know culture or history about other countries better than before.
4. ,I believe three men walk with me,there must have a teaher.
想表达“三人行，必有我师。”想法很好，但是表达有错误，首先，后边老师的单词拼写错误；另外，后边是there be句型，怎么能用 there have呢？
5. I surely know my live place’s things clearly 想表达我对我居住的地方所有事情都很熟悉，但是这样的英语表达太Chinese-English了，可以这样说：I surely know all the things in my living place clearly.
评析：
本文讲述想成为一名志愿者，即从知识能力，又从品德方面进行阐述，思路清晰，基本上没有太多的错误。
