The School Open Day
Today is Tom and Mary’s School Open Day.They are the guides of school.And they should lead the way to the visitors.The school is very beautiful today.There are seven floors in the school building.There are many people come to the school.But they don’t know the way where they should go.They have to ask the guides.The man asks to Mary:“Excuse me.Where’s the art room,please?” Mary answers gently:“It’s on the second floor,on the right.”The woman says:“Excuse me.Where are the toilets,please?”Tom says:“They’re on the ground floor,on the left.”
Tom and Mary are very polite and fidelity.They try their best to lead the way. Of course the visitors are very happy.They like the service very much.
批改：
1. It’s on the second floor,on the right.应该用:It’s on the second floor,you can find it on the right..
2. They’re on the ground floor,on the left. 改为：They’re on the ground floor, you can find them on the left.
评析：
文章写得不错，没有太多的错误，意思表达得清晰简洁了！
