批改：
1. Line1: Mrs Stone had spent the whole morning to pick ...
建议改成：Mrs Stone had spent the whole morning picking...
2. Line2: She was just wanted to come...
建议改成：She was just wanted to come...
3. Line5: She dropped her basket and run back home quickly with a exclaim sound.
建议改成：...and ran back home quickly with an outcry/scream.
评语：
作为一篇记叙文，基本上达到了写作的要求，但文章内容显得不够吸引人且有部分的语法错误
（假设最后一句Hearing the sound,the animal was scared 改成...the animal was scared to death
或Her scream scared off the animal 可能会生动一些）
