From the first part of the human mind tell us that our brain is learning about the world around us.
Since we were born, we had started learning something. Human use their brains to create new things, like the bridge builders build the bridge. Human also use their brains to find the way to solve problems. This similar to Alison delivered a child. If she wanted to make a huge effort, she would need to restructure.
From the young boy Elliot, we can know that the more use your brain, the more be clever of your brain. Therefore if people want to be clever and clever, they need to use their brain as much as they can.
Human’s activity is controlled by their mind. This is shown by Rebecca.
Memory is one of the skills of the brain. Some people have a horrendous memory, because they found a specially way to remember things. Everything has a relation with others. If we find the relations between two things, then we will be able to remember things easier and quickly.
1.From the first part of the human mind tell us that our brain is learning about the world around us.句子表达不是很明确，这样改看行不行：From the birth of the human mind,we know that our brain is to help us learn about the world around us.
2. This similar to Alison delivered a child. If she wanted to make a huge effort, she would need to restructure. 这句话也不知你想表达什么？或许是这样的：This is similar to Alison who delivered a child. If she wanted to make great effort, she would need to ...
3.the more use your brain, the more be clever of your brain 改成the more you use your brain, the cleverer you will be
4.horrendous 这个词是什么意思呢？是不是horrible "非常好的，今人恐怖的”?
5. a relation 改成some relation 比较好.
6.easier and quickly 改成 easier and more quickly
这篇习作，有个别地方表达不是很清楚。一些单词的使用比如比较级的用法还不是很了解，再看看有关方面的书就行了。不过思路还是很清晰，而且引用了一些例证，增加了文章的说服力。
