Mother don't cry

Mum

Where are you?

Why can’t I see the sun of today?

Why can’t I hear the singing of birds?

Why can’t I touch the kind face of you again？


In the class yesterday afternoon

I silently flew

In the dark sky

Like the stringless kite Dad and you flew in spring本句话最好移到下一行，构成 which Dad and you flew in spring
Which has been drifting 本句话就可以写成 and which has been driftingTowards somewhere far way

The place I flew towards is called Paradise

Where I will be a cherub

From now on

The brightest little star on the horizon

Will be your dearest daughter

Who will always watch you
Mum 为保持后边一致，最好将Mum拉到下边：Mum ，please don't worry
please don't worry

and dry your tears

Because you once told me to be strong

At least

I have my classmates

And her — my respectable head teacher

As companions

Please wear the crystal necklace around my neck.

Which you sent to me for my birthday

And which was my newest and favorite present

Mum, please don’t cry

Let me have a good sleep


Mum, please don’t cry

I am all right

And happily get to Paradise

Mum, please don’t cry

Very smooth is the way to Paradise

Where birds twitter and flowers are fragrant


Remembering we children, hand in hand, walked on the way to Paradise that night

When the evening lights had just been lit

We had a pleasant chat about our dreams

And described the bright future


Mum, please don’t cry

Paradise is so beautiful

I am very happy


Mum, you should live bravely

With my wishes

Dad and you will be both better

评价：

首先，非常感谢这位学生的诗歌作品，非常具有想象力和创造力，能够创作出这样的习作确实很惊人，而且感情丰富。

很显然这是一首现代自由诗，当然，自由诗应该说没有严格的限制，作为一位高中生能写成这样的诗已经实属不易；但是，如果以专业眼光来看的话，还可以对原作继续雕琢，因为如果学英美文学作品的话，会发现诗歌讲究音，韵，比如头韵，尾韵，五步音格等，就像这首诗的第一节，就写得非常好，而且非常宝贵的一点，诗中出现了cherub,这个源于《圣经》中的单词 ，更加富有神韵！