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I went to Beijing
作者:lwx950509    时间:2008-11-23    状态:已批改   点击数:59    [收藏该文章]
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        This summer,I went to Beijing.I think Beijing is a good place to have a vacation.
  In Beijing,I went to the Tiananmen Square,the Great Wall,the Summer Palace,the Palace Museum and the Beijing Zoo.I think they're all very interesting place.I like the Summer Palace very much.Because I visited the Wanshou mountain and the Foxiangge in the Summer Place.
  And I like the Beijing Zoo,too.Because I saw the interesting animals in the Beijng Zoo,I think the animals are very lovely and cute. I ate the Beijing roast duck.I think the Beijing roast duck is very delicious and famous.
  At last,I went to Tsinghua University and Beijing University.In the universities,I saw many doctors,they are very knowlegeable .I admire them very much!
  I love Beijing!



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1.第二段中“Tian’anmen Saquare”应加分隔符。
2.I think they’re all interesting place.”中“place”应加“s”变为复数,此处地点有多处。
评语:本文描述作者假期旅行,条理清晰,结构完整。文中无语法和拼写错误。个别地方应再细心些。通过本文可以看出作者的英语水平不错,但语感不强,应多进行阅读和写作训练,以增强语感,写出更加地道的英语短文。
                    
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