As we know, dormitory life is part of the college life.It's important for our study and rest.Sometimes,in our dormitory maybe have some controversial, owe to other things and personal hobby.
Harmonious dormitory life play a positive role in our college life ; it's mutually benefial for our and other members. We can live a happy life,hence we can put our heart to study and do other things. On the other hand, we can make more friends and decrease many annoy in our college.
There are numerous way to build a harmonious dormitory;but I would like to explore a fee of the most important ones here. For a start, it's essential for our to learn tolerance.Second , we will get ride of our bad habits.At last, we will have to share with each and make more friends.At the same time , we should often sweep our dormitory and ensure personal hygiene.We should try oue best to build a harmonious dormitory life for the sake of good study and good life.
批改：
1. dormitory life is part of the college life. 应该是a part of
2. in our dormitory maybe have some controversial 本句话最好采用there be句型。
3. Harmonious dormitory life play a positive role in our college life 主谓一致应该是单三形式。
4. it's mutually benefial for our and other members. 首先，单词拼写错误；其次后边是人称宾格即us
5. I would like to explore a fee of the most important ones here. 用这个单词不是太恰当。
6. it's essential for our to learn tolerance. 应该是Us。
7. we will have to share with each 是each other.
8. We should try oue best 笔误，应该是Our。
评析：
本文是一篇标准的议论文，作者思路清晰，结构清楚，而且运用了很多高级词汇和句型，应该是一篇很好的作文，但是要注意这个句型中it is for us to do sth ，不是for our.
On a Harmonious Dormitory Life
Dormitory life is an indispensable part of college life. But sometimes the harmony in the dormitory be disturbed in one way or another. As is known to all, a harmonious dormitory life is important to college students and benefits all the members. On one hand, we can have a good rest and put our heart into study. On the other hand, we will have a good mood and enjoy being together. There are several ways to create and maintain a harmonious dormitory life. Firstly, you have to evaluate your life-style and try to get rid of your dirty habits, if there are any. Secondly, when an annoying situation arises, you’ll just have to learn to tolerate each other and co-exist. Thirdly, you’ll have to share with each other and make good friends. In conclusion, we should try our best to build a harmonious dormitory life for the sake of good study and good life.
