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Nick's April Fool's Day
作者:quwen    时间:2008-11-30    状态:已批改   点击数:44    [收藏该文章]
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  Last April Fool's Day,Nick had became an April fool.Last April 1st,Nick got up when his alarm clock went off,he went to the barthrooom first,and then he took a shower,got dressed.He had some breakfast by himself.Then he went to school.But to his surprised,when he got there,the school was empty,he realized he was the only one there.After an hour,the other kids showed up.Finally,he realized that his brother had fooled him.He had became an April fool.



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1. Nick had became an April fool此处不能用过去完成时态,应改为Nick became an April fool.

2. then he took a shower,got dressed应改为then he took a shower and got dressed.

本文详细描述了整个事件的经过,语言运用比较得体,从整体上看,还是一篇不错的文章,但过去完成时态掌握的不是太好,在平时的学习中一定要注意这一点。

                    
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