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A letter
作者:zhwf    时间:2008-12-01    状态:已批改   点击数:49    [收藏该文章]
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Dear friend,

    How was your day off? Did you have fun travalling? I didn't have a fun day. I visited my uncles. When I got there,they were very busy working. I had to help them .On that day ,I was very tired.My aunt made dumplings for us in the evening.They thanked me for help them. Oh, i was very happy that day although I was very tired.  p lease write to me tell me your day off.I am waiting.

See you soon

Fang



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Did you have fun travalling?应是Did you have fun travelling ?单词写错

When I got there,they were very busy working很不错的句子,值得鼓励

They thanked me for help them. 应是They thanked me for helping  them. 动词接在介词的后面要加ing

 Oh, i was very happy that day although I was very tired. 注意 I 要大写,很好的句子,用了although

  p lease write to me tell me your day off.注意 大小写

很好的一篇习作,而且有很多很好的句子,值得我们学习,希望你能继续努力!

                    
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