Dear Jack
I was excited to receive you letter this morning and very happy to know that everything is going on well with you.
I’m a Senior Three Student. I have a little time before National College Entrance Examination on July 6th. I have a lot of homework everyday. My teacher said: “If we hard work, we can go to college.” So every student is busing reviewing of their homework. I feel very favour in my school life!
Time flies! I will try and keep trying on my best. I believed myself can pass the National college Entrance Examination!
Best wishes.
Yours,
Liu Ning
1．书信开头应用“，” Dear Jack 改为 Dear Jack，
2． I was excited to receive you letter this morning 这句中 you 应用形容词性物主代词your.
3. I have a little time before National College Entrance Examination on July 6th . 改为 It will be a little time before I have National College Entrance Examination on July 6th . 用it is/was… before… . 句型。
4. reviewing of 应去of . 因为review 是及物动词。
5. I feel very favour in my school life! 改为 I feel very busy in my school life!
6． I will try and keep trying on my best. 去掉on. try one’s best….句型
点评：作者这篇日记以书信的形式，写出了高三学生特别的心态。条例清晰，情感真挚，可读信强。
